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take one....i tink i gonnan sleep early tonight.

Journey To The Floor

During my journey to the floor
I begin to wonder.
Did my sins pin me down to damnation
Or was there a way I could have gotten out?
What could have changed this outcome,
Which would be better?
A bulletproof vest fortified by fear
Or the word backed up by the
Confidence that a higher being was near?

I know this world is unfair,
But why must you rid yourself
Of a person of such cheer?


R.I.P Panday
You will never be forgotten
 
Tainted Heart.

Poison on the lips of death,
you continue to fu*k with the devil,
don't know when to fold em,
you still push my buttons.

I envision a day where i would rip your heart out,
and stab it dead, till the little rascal doesn't move anymore.
Silent now, no more lies and pity, silent now.

You knew not to fu*k around because I'm to slick for you,
I know one to many tricks of the trade,
But you're still doing your sh*t,
I don't know who's stupider,
Is it me? for constantly taking you back?
Or you? who always seem to do me wrong and taint my heart with your abysmal elixir of pain.

I plan on massacring your heart and sanity,
Just for what you did to me.
Because revenge is mine,
And b*tch, what the fu*k goes around must come the fu*k around.


pardon my french guys.
 
RauCous said:
Ya'll better shut up
before i tell ya wat up
cuz you got no clue
of what i can do to you
you aint no expertz
just egg heads- with growth spurtz
yellin till your throat hurts
talkin in blurtz like lil squirts,
sounding stupid- cuz your words r slurred
reciting what you first heard- what just occured.
-when you just got dissed
now aint you pissed
so obious i could not miss
you came, called names, but your not ready for this.
You can beat me i'm a lyricist.
you fighting with gloves
i knock out with my fist.
come hard like a rock then i fade like da mist.
cant test this ninja, i'm on fire and my heat can singe ya .
your jaws flappin like doors- on a creaky hinge ha.
oh no... i got to go....
gotta leave some space to da rest o yo..
just keep yuh mouth shut else you'll spoil da show.
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oooooooooooo i lik dat!!! lol
 
nice one candy
 
I like your use of colour Candy, it adds to the imagery. Dark red is good for your poem. "til the little rascal doesn't move anymore" is good use of personification, you're talking about the person's heart which is metaphorical in itself but making it a little rascal adds more meaning and gives a better picture of what you mean. It draws attention to the person's heart as its own entity.. thats awesome. Its the little things like that which make poetry great.
If i was being too analytical forgive me lol I've been reading poetic technique all day. Poems are meant to be analysied.. and what you have there is a good poem. :)
Keep it up.. and do write more!
 
thanks! :) i enjoy ur evaluation! lol but i actually use d colors 2 express my feelings, red is anger, betrayal, hurt so on lol
 
ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhyaaaaaaaaaaaaa. ow ow ow.
 
YOU DONT CARE
it makes no sense when you say you dont care
you mostly act like you dont give a rip
but when i hang with others you dont wanna share
so you whisk me away & take me on a trip
when i call you on it what you say is fake
"i dont care" you say
but you say it for own sake
but then try to get me to stay
ive been here for you for years
so speak up now
come on, im all ears
dont let me down
im not tryin to pressure you
i dont do this for torture
all i want is the truth
& youre dead wrong if you think i think this is pleasure
if you cant say whats in your heart
then ill be done
because i should have ended it from the start
bt i didnt because i thought you were the one
so stop bein scared
say it out loud
i thought you cared
say it in a crowd
i dont care where
just sat it please
youre not bein fair
let it out with ease
you look at me when i walk away
you dont know what to do
you think of the one thing that might get e to stay
"I LOVE YOU!!!"
 
you're adopted.....your parents dont even like you
 
Dude??? Dats harsh dat hurt me =[ lol i am d evil master, i am soon 2 dominate my teddi bears n summon dem 2 hard labor!! Den i shall take ovr d galaxy cuz d world is mine!!! [accordin 2 scarface lol]
 
Lately i am reading you guyz poems and it realll hostile..everyone aiight? lol like everyone having stress these days or wah btw they are reallyy good i love them
 
To The Water
Lead me out on a stormy night
On a procession to a baptisimal lake
You Take my hand as I take your invite
As we brace ourselves from the winds and the wake
Mumbling thunder echoes our solem pledge
Lightning illuminates the darkened depth
And shows the things we seek to dredge
Yet still things for which we pay our debt
No rest from the tempest is given
Forgiveness by submerging the only way
To rid myself from that with which I've striven
And wash the grime and gore away
So push me now below the troubled surface
That I may face the remains of many a drowned dream
This airless space I won't embrace
But in fear suppress the reflex to scream
Keep me longer to make me wonder
I must face my devils in this hell of water
But dont faulter to keep me under
Till I find Peace since twas I who sought her
If or when I ever find my grail
In this drowning pool I comb
If I ever resist my need to fail
Just dry me off and take me home.
.
:| scary.
 
(writers block)
STUCK
It's 3am, Not that it matters
I did not get to sleep at all.
You kept me up like acid reflux
I'm sad a slave as sorrow's thrall.
Trying hard to get this written
And get it done to throw away.
All is fruitless, You wont see it
And there's nothing good for Me to say
But I must keep writing,
Must force this out so I wont hurt.
Yeah I have to keep on fighting.
Must stay strong least I revert
To the boy who once loved You.
Its 11:30 I'm nearly half done
And I think I'm skipping lunch.
I have no appetite when I write,
And I cant keep down what I munch
Because You're always on My thoughts
And I fail to keep You out
Bittersweet is all You left me
I had the best now I'm without.
But will You see
that its not me I'm crying for
Why cant it be
That We're in love like once before..
But its over now and I'm alone somehow
It's overcast its getting rainy
It's getting cold I cant get warm
It's kinda sad this has Me crazy
But I'm not worried about this storm.
I'm still contemplating You
I wonder if You're feeling happy
Are You content with Your life,
Or like Me You find it crappy
I'm sorry that I knew You
and I'm sorry We didn't last
I pray You made it through
These final lines I cant get past..
At least You'll never know that I've never let You go...
 
......hmm....raucous....boi.....da girl hav yuh....hehe

PPl sry abt no writing.....i swear I have a GREAT excuse but it's a secret project for now. I'll let you guys in on it as soon as I can. Here's sum random scribbling I did recently.

When I was a child
I wanted to change the world.
I wanted to be the batman who has to fight
One thousand times harder cuz he has no superpowers.
Or the Toph who has to feel
Ten times more because she cannot see.
I wanted to be the fallen angel to
Grow back his wings and bring things like miracles to this world,
One feather at a time.
There are many things in this world that I wanted to be, touch, hear and see
But I cannot.
There's only one thing in this world that I will be
And that is me.
No need for superpowers to do that
No need for a magical hat or suit
Because the armor I wear is stronger than anything in this world,
It cannot be torn, ripped, tarnished or dirtied.
Now all that I want to be is the
Black father who takes care of his children
Even after their mother has gone.
The man who helps all others before himself
And shares with the poor even when he is in need of wealth.
I still want to make a difference,
So as of today I will show no weakness,
I will become a hero of the real world
And rise to righteousness
Saving everyone that I can.


Here's a lil sneak peek of a line from my project....I could get in trouble for puttin this here but wth. I promise you this one is going to be hot. (will be recorded and posted on utube:)

How deep within the rhyme do we have to go to see
That time is not stopping or even slowing down for us.
 
If the rain never stop the sky from falling, why should we?
 

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